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Hawaii
is known for their natural wonders and Hawaiian heritage that attract many
tourists from across the globe. People pay attention to the beauties of Hawaii
but don't really notice places like parks or places that shelter many homeless
people and not being aware of it surprises many people when they take notice of
it.
Hotels
in Hawaii attract tourist to the best of their ability from Food, Hawaiian
Heritage, to location that effects how many tourists they attract. One hotel
that recently was built that attracts many people and is also famous for its
mark is the Aulani Resort. One main reason it is famous is for its Mickey Mouse
mark which helped attract many of people's attention. The hotel depicts
Hawaii's Heritage so well that even people from Hawaii favor it. A local from
Waipahu even said "It's as if it were a different island yet still on
Oahu". Another famous hotel in Hawaii is the Hilton Waikiki Beach. This
hotel gives a wide variety of activities for tourist to participate in, The
hotel creates a comfortable atmosphere for all of the guests.. Hilton's
location gives tourists accessibility to go around town. It's famous for its
famous for it big slide and MAC daddy pancakes which was showed on Man vs. Food.
These are just some reasons tourists also choose to visit Hawaii, they also go
to see natural wonder, national park, and a certain memorial.
Some
of the best attractions in Hawaii all have a unique feature just to itself that
attracts many tourists that wish to see its wonders and some are free. This
makes tourists even more attracted to it just hearing the word free. the USS
Arizona memorial allows you to get in for free but if you want to have a better
experience paying is also an option, this is also true for some other
attractions to visit. People also come to see places such as the Polynesian
culture center to see the history and what has happened throughout the years.
People who would want to broaden their knowledge about another culture would be
interested in the Polynesian Culture Center. Also those who wish to know about
Pearl harbor or had someone in their family around that time. Things like that has
effected who has come and who has stayed in Hawaii.
Unlike
all the other sites parks are ones that are not so good around in Hawaii, there
may be some that are well taken care of but some are the homes of some less
fortunate. As tourism takes a major role in how Hawaii makes money, if Hawaii
were to have a lower revenue some people would have to be jobless because the
place they were working for has shut down. Many people only have one job to
rely on so if they get fired it may cause them to be homeless. If someone were
to go to a park that may not be well supervised, they may be surprised to see
the amount of people. It's not just parks, there are also people sitting around
Chinatown. In Chinatown you can see the amount of people who are jobless or those
who might just be lazy. People can also see tents of those beside sidewalks or
those who beg for money. These are just some things you can see on a trip to a
Hawaii if you just take a short trip.
In
all Hawaii is a good place to visit but if you walk around a bit you can see
that there are still people who are homeless. It wouldn't even matter if Hawaii
is a paradise, it's still like any other place with good views, hotels, and
people living on the streets. But for those who like natural beauty, Hawaii is
a great place to be.
Your subtopic is a bit unclear in your entire essay, not sure if you are discussing hotels, things to do or money. You need to refocus the essay and make sure that your thesis in your intro clearly states it. Also you need to find more effective evidence. A person's opinion is not really good research. Something more effective would be a professionals opinion or facts about actual aulani resort. Also please read over some of your word use contains error or comprehension errors. For example, "mickey mouse mark" is highly confusing and doesnt make sense.
ReplyDeleteLastly your conclusion is VERY CONFUSING. You all of a sudden talk about homeless people then say how hawaii has good hotels, but natural beauty is great. None of this was even mentioned in the body section except for hotels. Please redo. AS(2-)